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I made it better, imo

A couple of days ago someone posted a poem that I thought was great on this site. I copied it, cause they said I could. They also said that it was not their creation, and that they couldn't remember whose it was, that they got it off another site.

I edited it to what I think is a much better version. I would appreciate comments on the changes, I will add the original so you can compare. Keep in mind that if you don't like my version that we may be speaking in a different flow, which would cause the poem to sound different.

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Going through much...

Wow... Two and a half weeks ago if you asked what I wanted to do I'd probably say I wanted to be with one specific person, the friend I made near the end of last summer.

It's been a month since I've done anything with him and now I can't help but feel disconnected from him.

If you ask me what I wanted to do three days ago I would probably say something like " I want to get over the fact that I can't find all the answers."

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calling all guys!!!

I'm being a silly dilly person. I'm just in such a good mood after my terribly bad day at work that I'm staying up super duper late in my good mood only to wake up in a probable bad one to go to school tomorrow! YAY! Let's rejoice in that bit of stupidity I'm enacting right now...YAY!!

Anyways, now that that little bout of sillyness is out perhaps I can write something of interest.

I feel like I have forgotten to mention a few things I think I should voice but forgot about in my, thankfully, brief intro to oasis.

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the new but old...

Well like I said in my little biography some of you, just maybe some of you, may remember me as analyticallyinclined.

if so, please remember what I've written at that time, but understand that that was a good time ago, and that humans all change within time. I've grown so much but I'm still so far behind it feels.

My counselor keeps saying that I should remember just how much I have grown and its true I have. I used to be such a perturbed child, confused and lost in an unloving world. It's not quite like that anymore, not at all, but things still aren't within what I would describe as a state of natural flow.

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