I take on the persona of an African American slave in North America, and I write a story about it. That's my paper.

So what I had in mind..:

I'm born into slavery and raised on a rice plantation in south carolina, (very little with the background description because it's only a four page short story.) I've developed intense lust for the master's offspring (really daughter, but in my story I'm making this character's gender unknown the best I can, with only revealing subtle hints in her description). We make eye contact and visit a lot whenever no one's watching, etc.
One day, our attraction over powers us, and we start making out in a back feed room or something, knocking everything down ;)
welll...then the master walks in (shocker! ..not really) he screams vulgarities and beats me to death while I just watch her cryyy...
the end.
of course I'll fancy that up, but that's the gist of it all..

any opinions????
I could really use the help, this is the last historical fiction paper I ever have to write in high school, and I'd like it to be amazing.

I may even change the whole plot idea, idk yet. I've just been wanting to write a fiction story with a lesbian character.

but, yes, any ideas would be much much much appreciated, thanks!