A plethora of mice.... oh, shit

underage_thinker's picture

So. I added 2 verses to the heartbreak child, because I made the last weird harmonizing part into a bridge. I'm still really mad at my computer, though, because I don't know why it won't recognize my guitar... Ugh. But I'm working on a piano part, and since I cant' really play the piano all that well, it's not working out that perfectly.... *cough*. Anyway, here's the song now:
*dim lights*
*drum roll*
*cough*
*lights on*
-wait, wait, where'd I put that notebook?-
Just a sec
*rummages through bag*
-okay,okay I got it-
*dim lights*
*drum roll*

In my forest home, a small abode
The vines, they cannot move
The sweeping wind, it soothes
my crippled tongue

Everyone can see what’s in between
your eyes and what is happening
And all the air you breathe is in between
your eyes and all that’s meant to be

The way the sunlight comes through the trees
makes your face light up, your hair move with the breeze
A green skirt wrapped ‘round your waist
but nothing hold your feet in place

You walk towards me with arms outstretched
catching the raindrops from my eyes
And from the stars a battle cry is heard
but you and I don’t need to say a word

Everyone can see what’s in between
your eyes and what is happening
And all the air you breathe is in between
your eyes and all that’s meant to be

From the sweetness of your words
every day I seem so self-assured
But in the forest of my dreams
My hopes will dissolve into a bundle of steam

From the fire, you stare
at the heartbreak child
From the fire you stare
at the heartbreak child

Painted smiles and plastered tongues
This is what the worlds become
A scheming look behind her back
You give the signal, a little snap

We run away hand in hand
She thinks we've left a permanent brand
on the skin of purest snow
Where hatred goes, no one knows

When I touch you, the world disappears
'Cause in this light there are no fears

Comments

Disney's picture

Bravo

Good work! I can't play guitar, so I am especially proud of you! Try something more upbeat though, like a Pepto commercial. I hope you laughed :)

You're Amazing.

underage_thinker's picture

~giggles~

:) Thanks, I did. I actually have written a couple of more upbeat songs, but they're crap....

Dreaming_Nevermore's picture

I like it! I tried to write

I like it! I tried to write a song with my friend once over summer vacation, but it sucked...mostly because she can write music and I can't. When it's finished, may I hear the guitar part? I don't know much, and everything I do know is bluegrass stuff my dad taught me, but I like listening to guitars.

All they can tell you is what they have seen and heard, in their time in this world, a third of it spent in sleep and dreaming, another third of it spent in telling lies. - Ursala K. Le Guin

underage_thinker's picture

Thanks. Yea, I'll try to

Thanks. Yea, I'll try to upload the mp3 when I'm done, but I don't really know how, so i can put it on my ipod or something.

Dreaming_Nevermore's picture

Holy shit, I love your new

Holy shit, I love your new icon.

All they can tell you is what they have seen and heard, in their time in this world, a third of it spent in sleep and dreaming, another third of it spent in telling lies. - Ursala K. Le Guin

5thstory's picture

Awesome! Bravo! It's great

Awesome! Bravo! It's great that you can actually compose and play, wow!

" . . . The sun does not shine upon this fair earth to meet frowning eyes, depend upon it." Charles Dickens

underage_thinker's picture

:D Thanks, I feel so special

:D Thanks, I feel so special