
Shoe Shopping
Please Mama
I would pray
Time to get some new shoes
That you say
Thanks Mama
I tread my foot
Angel’s spreading wings
Soles torn at the root
But Mama
That shoes so many
How nil to fit
None to my fancy
Why Mama
Only these fit so light
But told me the lady in blue
They are both not right
So Mama
Both left they may be
They shape mine perfect
As you can see
Sorry Mama
These are what I want
Although I know
You bleed up front
Yes Mama
People stare at me weird
Yet Hermes passes fast
Those wings will only be seen so rare
--Uncertain
Wow... that was an intense
Wow... that was an intense referance. Great job... I read it the first time, went "whoa," read it again and went "oh..." and then read it the third time and said, "Holy shit." It was very profound. Congrats.
Whatever I did, I didn't do it.
Thanks :)
Thanks :) Just wondering though... would some language techniques and allusions in there be confusing?
Nope
No its not confusing and I like it. I'm not sure the hermes referrence works though, the classical element seems at odds with the rest of the language
"Sexual intercourse began in nineteen sixty-three (which was rather too late for me)"