I called asking my college graduate brother for help on my essay. I had posted it in the forum asking for help, so you can all guess I'm very nervous about it. I desperately want to get into this University, and I need a good essay to help my chances.
Today, I called my brother, and he criticized and he says I sound very uncertain of what I am talking about. This essay is more of my personal opinion on things, but I can't seem to understand how to fix it in 4 hours to turn it in on time. I don't want to make it political, just of my opinion. He tries lecturing me over what is the right way to right it, and that my writing isn't good enough for college. I argue that my teachers say I have decent writing, but he says up to college standards it just don't cut it. But isn't that obvious since I'm not yet in college? Wouldn't admissions understand that?
Suddenly, the doorbell rings. I answer it and my brother gets mad saying I'm ignoring him and he yells, hanging up on me. Now I'm left feeling my essay is shit, and no one able to help!
If I don't get accepted to the University of my dreams there's no one to blame but me. I hate how the process is so selective. I hate that I wasn't involved in enough extracurriculars since I was very shy freshman and soph year, and my best friend dropped out junior year without telling me.
Why do I even try? Every time I think I have a chance or hope for anything someone has to harshly pull me down.