1st half of Chapter 1 of my book, Generation Lost ...feedback appreciated

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Chapter 1
Struggles

STANLEY MURPHY, OR “Murf

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devildog's picture

I'm intrigued to find out wha

I'm intrigued to find out what happens, and it seems like an accurate portrayal of public school life (hell, it reminds me of mine). The only thing I would change is the first paragraph-I feel like the second is a much better first paragraph.

Anyways, I'm eager to see more:)

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Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.
Oscar Wilde

Selfishness is not living as one wishes to live, it is asking others to live as one wishes to live.
Oscar Wilde

napalmhamster's picture

Thank you

Thanks for your feed back. That is exactly what I'm trying to do; accurately portray life in high school. In fact, I've modelled Stanley's life much like my own. I've been working on this book for half a year, and just recently finished chapter 9. I'll be posting the second half of chapter 1 shortly.

My mission is to see the world with eyes unclouded by pain, confusion, or hate