chapters 3 and 4

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hope sat down tiredly in her AP calculus class. gretchen trailed behind her. "What was that about?" gretchen asked after she set her books down on her desks. hope looked back ar her questionalingly.
" i know people fawn over devyn but you looked...diffrent" hope looked as if she didnt understand. hope looked at her as if she didnt understand. grecthen shrugged and turned to her math. hopes mind raced. what if devyn saw her looking at her like that. it would be a repeat of last year. thats not what hope needed. all of a sudden "hello, devyn", "hey, dev" "wassup, dev", "how you been dev" all kinds of greetings shooted into the air. hope glanced up and saw the tall beauty standing in the door way. devyn seemed to be on a best freind basis with everyone. nerds, jocks, punks, all seemed to know devyn. hope lowered her head to scan her math book, hoping no one would notice her.
"hi, i'm devyn russell" a soft velevt vioce tolled. a big, callused yet very feminine hand was thrust into hopes face.
" that's nice" hope said sarcastically and returned to her book. she couldnt say that she wanted to sit and talk to her for hours. her pride wouldnt let her.
"in american culture, this is the part when you say hi and then your name follows" devyn had knelt down to become eye to eye with hope. hope purposlly avioded her eyes.
"Hi, i'm hope clarke." she held out her fragile hand that was enveloped in a stron, tender handshake. Hope looked up hoping that would start a conversation. devyns eyes were amazed her. devyns right eye was a dark, forest green with one thick band of clear ice blue which hung vertically on the top of the retna. Her left eye was the same colour of the band in her green eye, but the sliver of colour which hung on the eye was the same forest green. they looked like mix matched pieces of a puzzle. devyn flashed a smile which held straight, white, and dazziling teeth. her smile could kill.
"That didnt hurt, now did it?" she stood and with one fluid, majical movement headed to empty seat at the front of the class. hope sighed feeling she had been attacked and let her head fall backwards. "here we go" hope closed her eyes and sighed.

devyn sat down in the hard wooden chair. her smile widened across her face. This had already been a great day. hope clarke had been known far before she stepped into bandberry. everyone at bandberry high knew about the scandel that had caused so much controvery. devyn smiled and turned her attention to the teacher. "This should be an interesting year" she whispered to herself and then let her mind wander.

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Devyn staggered into the lunchroom in a daze. it was a tall open building with tables littering it. it had benches and stools, and wet bars. for a public school, the school was rolling in dough. they had the most influential people's kids going here; including to herself. she walked in and every head in the lunchroom, turned. Devyn smiled and headed to back of the room to the table where Emily sat.
“Hey, sweaty

Comments

Sirens call's picture

nice one

Great again! I really, really like it so far :D Keep writing please!!!

~Morgasm~

shattered dreams's picture

wonderful

very good if i do say so myself, i cant wait to read the next ones to come.

armadillo's picture

Didn't mean to critique so much before!

I just wanted to see you try! Anyway, your story's really starting to get interesting! I thought I hated love stories before, cause' that's all my momma reads - heterosexual ofcourse! Anyway, you and Flamefish are getting me hooked and I guess you could say, "like mother - like daughter" or something.

PROBLEM_CHILD's picture

awesome!!!!!!

man that's good i can't wait to read the next hehehe it's like story time.

I want to cry but my pride won't let me.

FlameFish08's picture

everyones pretty much said everything. please keep posting tho, i need to stress that!

saweeeetttt's picture

awesome story so far

I know that I'm reading your story a month late, but I think its really good so far and I'm looking foward to reading the rest of the story. You're really talented.
I have to say though, and this isn't to make fun of you, but my favorite grammatical error of yours by far was “Everything okay sweaty?